Successful, in a sense.

[mitchfilsinger]

In a sense because I wrote a poem for the first time in my life where I was truly inspired, and it my best work yet. I wanted to share it with everyone here.

To Stay In What Is Now

With shouts of joy and booming drums,
I scramble, like when I was young,
through dirt and rock and roots,
climbing on a thought that cannot be named,
and on a feeling that cannot be ignored.
I am reeled in by my heart
higher and higher,
the music not in my thoughts,
but a place beyond my thoughts
that is now a memory but was once a reality.
And like catching a ball at a baseball game,
I burst into a field
and feel as if by some divine miracle,
it found me,
and it is a part of me,
and I am at peace.

Here I see the remnants of a destructive festivity,
a night where this unmovable peace
was interrupted by one of those nights
that can only be had when you are young.
Old tires are scattered with purpose around
the charred remains of a log half burnt,
whose bark is etched with memories
of life and fulfillment,
of self destruction and confusion.

The light pulls my awareness up and outward
to small shrubs reaching for the sun,
to bushes and small trees hidden behind
scattered pillars of wood.
The wind, like an instrument, blows through the trees,
and pulls my awareness even higher
to the dancing leaves.
And like pillars in front of the Pearly Gates,
painted on a blue backdrop,
they extend upwards and explode in fireworks of
orange and yellow and green,
longing for the invisible touch
of their mother in the sky.

I let the moment completely engulf me,
a moment of perfection,
letting the cool air fill my lungs
and take with it all the tension and stress
I hold in my body.
And I do the only thing I can do
at moment like this,
when my past and future
are lost in the peaceful dimension of timelessness.
When the tool in my head,
calls upon a thought
and time finally stains the carpet of my mind.
I take my music, and take one last look,
and then move on,
because that is all I can do,
to stay in what is now.

Edit: Criticism is welcome.

Mitch

[chris063]

That is beautiful Mitch, thank you so much for sharing it. I felt a very deep sense of peace while reading it, and I hope you will want to share many more of your inspirational poems with everyone!

[Edwin]

Originally Posted by mitchfilsinger

Edit: Criticism is welcome.

Mitch

How can anyone criticise something that comes from your heart ?

Thanks for sharing !

[Montana Keith]

Ah Mitch, my friend,
Your poem moves me--it brings to awareness shifts I'm experiencing in my body, in my life, in everything I'm noticing.

You had an experience, and somehow like a gifted artist who chooses and combines paints from his palette, you have been inspired to select words and combine them is a way that speaks to me so deeply. Dang dude, you're awesome!

I don't know exactly what it was about your poem, but it brought to mind a painting by one of the local artists near to where I live. His name is Robert Duncan. Here is the link to this painting.

Robert Duncan Studios

Like your poem, this painting speaks to me on a level that I am just starting to understand. I love to go for walks in nature. At one time in my life, I romantically considered being a forest ranger or a range manager--I grew up in the prairie lands of Montana. Like the young woman in this painting, sometimes we all stand in the midst of tangled branches and thick undergrowth of thoughts and feelings, AND somehow in the silence, we sense that its all okay and that we're okay. In a way that's hard to explain, we sense that we are deeply loved and cherished.

Thanks so much for sharing. I am so grateful for the people I'm meeting through this forum. I am feeling so fortunate and blessed. Take care. --Keith

[mitchfilsinger]

I love those moments when you can be just taken away by the beauty and aliveness of nature. Thank you so much for the picture Keith, it is wonderful.

That would be so cool being a Forest Ranger, being out in nature all day experiencing new things with each passing day. And all of it would be free!! I would love to just live in the wild for a little while. It would sure be interesting. It's been very nice meeting you too, Keith, thanks a lot for the reply.

Mitch